On the hot and beautiful summery day Josiah had a trial for
real Madrid. It was for young and beautiful juniors. As Josiah walk in he had a
surprise and saw a pretty nice girl Josiah asked can I help you with any think. Veronica said instead can i ask
you a question. Junior exclaimed go ahead. Veronica said may I go out with you Josiah froze as still as
a silver army soldier that was about to get fired from his job.... Josiah hugged her and took
her number from the beautifully girl he has ever seen. but Josiah was worried
about his bossy boss. Josiah boss has
made him run as if he was about to die. Then Josiah and veronica was one
together in their life.
The end
I like your vocabulary and your description. You could improve your description but it is still good. I feel the love. I love your use of technique.
ReplyDeletei like the idea of the that he was still as a silver army soldier that was about to get fired but i think that in bit of describing the words that you should of described it more but apart firm that everything was good
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